0n the summer day, there are two dogs gliding like dolphins in the warm, salty water. The white and black dog is about to step on the dog. The waves look like jelly ripples wriggling. The blue eyes glowing of the black and white dog. The smooth water, is sparkling like diamonds. Wispy clouds floating like hover-boards.
The little dog is trying to get the stick and boom! Crash! They crashed together when the big dog wasn't looking.
Max, I love the way you have worked so hard to include activated nouns and made them clear for us to see! You have set the scene by telling us it was a summer day and we are at the salty water. I can read your secret clue and guess that we are at the beach!
ReplyDeleteChallenge:
Three of your sets of coloured words are activated nouns but ... 'blue glowing eyes'... is not. How could we change that sentence so that the eyes get activated?
Try:
The dog's eyes, glowing blue, caught my attention. What was it staring at?