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The Dragon - Buddy Writing
Yesterday I found a baby dragon outside on my front door step. It was curled up like a tiny ball. It was the colour of a little grey rock. I picked it up and his little talons dug deep into my skin.
Today was pet day and I didn't have anything so I decided to bring this tiny dragon. I gently hid him in my bag so Mum wouldn't see and headed off to school.
When I got to school all of my friends were scared of my baby dragon. When mum came to school to look around she saw the dragon. She was shocked! She didn’t know what to say. All I knew was that she wouldn't let me keep it!
Writing by Darcie and Isabella
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Yesterday I found a baby dragon outside on my front door step. It was curled up like a tiny ball. It was the colour of a little grey rock. I picked it up and his little claws dug deep into my skin.
Today was pet day and I didn't have anything so I decided to bring this tiny dragon. I gently hid him in my bag so Mum wouldn't see and headed off to school.
When I got to school all of my friends were scared of my baby dragon. When mum came to school to look around she saw the dragon. She was shocked! She didnt know what to say. All I knew was that she wouldn't let me keep it.
Written at Buddy Writing by Darcie and Isabella.
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