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On Monday I went to the flying burrito brothers. We met our dad there so we went in and I saw my dad. We ordered our food, our drink, our dessert and milkshakes.

First we had our main food. I had Nachos and my drink was lemonade. We ate our food ( it had a lot of tomato) and I got a lot of chips.

Then we got some desert. My desert was churros and ice cream with raspberry sauce, chocolate sauce and caramel sauce. It was filling because I had two churros and ice cream. Churros are a Mexican donut and they are very long and tasty.

Then we got our milkshakes the flavours were Oreo milkshake and snickers milkshake. We had two sips of each and I got the Oreo milkshake first it tasted like chocolate. Then I got the snickers milkshake it was really salty so I didn't have two sips on the snickers milkshake.

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On Monday I went to the flying burrito brothers. We met our dad there so we went in and I saw my dad. We ordered our food, our drink, our dessert and milkshakes.

First we had our main food. I had Nachos and my drink was lemonade. We ate our food ( it had a lot of tomato) and I got a lot of chips.

Then we got some desert. My desert was churros and ice cream with raspberry sauce, chocolate sauce and caramel sauce. It was filling because I had two churros and ice cream. Churros are a Mexican donut and they are very long and tasty.

Then we got our milkshakes the flavours were Oreo milkshake and snickers milkshake. We had two sips of each and I got the Oreo milkshake first it tasted like chocolate. Then I got the snickers milkshake it was really salty so I didn't have two sips on the snickers milkshake.