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There was a funny looking door across the road. My Friends told me to go and knock on the door. “Ah” said the people from next door, “there's a big big dragon.”
Suddenly the dragon said come here. I said “ok he tickled me it was funny”. The dragon took me home. Mum said” where have you been?” I said “no where” mum gave me a smile. I said “bye” to the dragon. Me and the dragon were best friends forever!
This is what we started with:
There was a crackly door across the road.
My friends deared me to go an knock on the door ah said the people from next door there's a big big dragon.
Suddenly the dragon said come here. I said ok he tickled me it was funny. The dragon tock me home. mum said were have you been? I siad no were mum gave me a smile. I siad by to the dragon. Me and the dragon were best friends forever.
By Charlotte.
By Charlotte.
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