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Intro:

Anzac Day is celebrated by Australians and New Zealanders all over the word. It is not a time to glorify war but to remember the sacrifice of our soldiers.

Who:

WW1 didn't just affect the Anzacs but the whole country. 15 year olds and over went to war. Women were called land girls they had ration books. one of the battles of WW1 war between the Anzacs and the German allies 25th april 1914 gallipoli turkey 1000's of Anzacs and German allies died. Anzac day is  celebrated by the people of nz and australia. It is not a time to glorify war but to remember the sacrifice of our soldiers.

Battle:one of the most devastating battles of  WW1 was the Anzac  against the German allies on 25th april 1914 the Anzacs soldiers landed on the beach at Gallipoli. Their purpose was to take over this part of turkey to help with the war against Germany but the turks  and Germans were positioned on the cliffs and shot the Anzacs as they landed thousands of soldiers were killed and engaged although we lost the battle we remembered  Anzacs Day every year we we do this because australian and new Zealand soldiers fought bravely for us.

Parade:

at dawn all over nz and Australia 25th april people gathered and remembered the Anzacs young and old people come to the Anzac Day parade like st john, families, services, the families sometimes wear their medal there great grandad that they wear with pride they wear poppies the dawn parade you would have to to sing the national anthem and 1 min silents. it is in bertent to combiner les we forget from our Anzacs war should be no more

Ending:

So remember to attend on anzac day service. Here you can show respect to our veterans. All Kiwis and Australians know that Anzac Day is a special time to remember the Anzacs.

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Intro
Anzac Day is celebrated by Australians and New Zealanders all over the word. It is not a tme to glorify war but to remember the sacrifice of our soldiers.
Who:
WW1 didnt just aftect the Anzacs but the whole country. 15 year olds and over went to war. Women were called land girls they had ration books. one of the battels of WW1 war betwen the Anzacs and the German aillies 25th april 1914 gallipoli turkey 1000's of Anzacs and German aillies died. Anzac day is  celebrated by the people of nz and australia. It is not a time to glorafie war but to rember the sacrifice of our soldiers.
Battle:one of the most devaststing battlels of  WW1 was the Anzac  aganst the German allies on 25th aprill 1914 the Anzacs soldiers landed on the beach at Gallipoli. Their purpose was to take over this part of turkey to help with the war against Germany but the turkys  and Germans were poitoned on the cliffs and shot the Anzacs as thay landed thousands of soldiers were killed and indgerged arthogh we lost the battel we rememred  Anzacs Day every year we we do this because australion and new Zeland soldiers fought bravly for us. Parade:
at dawn all over nz and Australia25th aprill people gathered and remembered the Anzacs young and old people come to the Anzac Day parad like st john, families, services, the familes sometimes wear there medel there great grandad that thay wear with proud thay wear poppys the dawn parade you would have to to sing the natinel athem and 1 min silents. it is in bertent to comnener les we ferget from our Anzacs war should be no more
Ending

So rember to attend on anzac day service. Here you can show respect to our veterans. All Kiwis and Austrailans know that Anzac Day is a special time to remember the Anzacs.  that Anzac Day is a special time to remember the Anzacs.